Process of Writing

I’m a writer but as you know, or are about to know, lol. Every writer needs help! So just for the fun of it (and because chapter three of hardwired isn’t finished yet =) I thought I’d share a little of my writing process on one of the scenes from chapter two. So to start off, here’s the original scene:

 

It was early evening as Jason and Serena prepared for their night out. They were using the master bathroom since it was unoccupied, and had a separate dressing room that Serena liked. Jason stood in the main bathroom in front of the dual mirrors adjusting his black leather jacket. Yeah, he wasn’t what you’d call fashion crazy, but had a particular way he wanted it to hang. No, not really. If the truth be spoken he was waiting for Serena to hurry up and finish!

“So what are you gonna tell them?” She called to him over the wall.

“What else?” Jason replied. “That you escaped with a scar.”

“You’re not gonna tell them the whole story?”

“That’s up to you Sims. Hey are you almost finished in there?”

“Just a sec.” She called back. Jason groaned inwardly. That could mean anything! But in a few seconds she opened the door and stepped out. “Ta-da!” She proclaimed. Since his back was turned Jason looked at her in the mirror. “Whoa.” Was all he could say. “You like it?” She asked, spinning around. “Yeah,” Jason replied a bit dazed. “You look beautiful.”

Serena’s heart skipped a beat; he had never called her beautiful before. “Aw thanks, Bro.” She said kissing him on the cheek. Now it was Jason’s turn to be shocked. She had never really kissed him before.

“Awkward silence,” Serena said after a few moments.

“Ah…sorry it…it’s just…” Jason fumbled for a rational response.

“We need to get used to this brother sister thing.” Serena finished. “We suck at taking affection.”

“Nah, I think it’s just me.” Jason replied. “I’m weird.”

Serena patted him on the back. “Come on, let’s go,” She continued grabbing his hand and pulling him with her. “We’ve gotta pick up Shelby.”

Now even though I have written something I’m pretty much satisfied with, I’m very much aware that I’m not a girl. And so when I write for female characters, I like to be as close to real as possible so I observe my friends and people I see to get ideas and use them in my stories. Still for this scene I felt that was not enough I needed some active female input. Not a problem for me, I know a few girls =D So I asked one (Kim-Lee Patterson,  my sister, you should check her out: writersforlife.wordpress.com =) how long it takes to get ready to go out. =D Based on what she told me about hair types and what I know about girls wanting to look nice I sort of re-constructed the scene. I have to say though, it was mostly her input that helped me out =) And here we go with the reworked scene:

 

It was early evening as Jason and Serena prepared for their night out. They were using the master bathroom since it was unoccupied, and had a separate dressing room that Serena liked. Jason stood in the main bathroom in front of the dual mirrors adjusting his black leather jacket. Yeah, he wasn’t what you’d call fashion crazy, but had a particular way he wanted it to hang. No, not really. If the truth be spoken he was waiting for Serena to hurry up and finish!

“So what are you gonna tell them?” She called to him over the wall.

“What else?” Jason replied. “That you escaped with a scar.”

“You’re not gonna tell them the whole story?”

“That’s up to you Sims. Hey are you almost finished in there?”

“Just a sec.” She called back. Jason groaned inwardly. That could mean anything! But in a few seconds she opened the door and stepped out. “Ta-da!” She proclaimed. Since his back was turned

Jason looked at her in the mirror. “Whoa.” Was all he could say. “You like it?” She asked, spinning around. “Yeah,” Jason replied a bit dazed. “You look beautiful.”

Serena’s heart skipped a beat; he had never called her beautiful before. “Aw thanks, Bro.” She said kissing him on the cheek. Now it was Jason’s turn to be shocked. She had rarely ever kissed him.

“Awkward silence,’ Serena said after a few moments, as she re-did her hair.

“Ah…sorry it…it’s just…” Jason fumbled for a rational response.

“We need to get used to this brother sister thing.” Serena finished. “We suck at taking affection.”

“Nah, I think it’s just me.” Jason replied. “I’m weird.”

Serena patted him on the back and resumed her primping. “Think I’m gonna try something new tonight.”

“Oh yeah? Like what?” Jason asked with mild interest.

Serena laughed, condescendingly “If I told you, you wouldn’t know.”

“Oh come on!” Jason protested. “I know hair styles.”

“Then can you tell me what I’m doing now?” Serena quizzed.

Jason observed a bit before speaking. “You’re doing a…um…

“Mm-hm,” Serena said in a challenging tone.

“A thing…w…with a comb—and then a brush.”

“Go on!” She urged.

“To do a thing that will take three hours.” Jason finished, smugly.

“That’s to wash and dry it, silly.” Serena returned.

“Oh well then it will take an hour.” Jason decided

“I already spent that hour.” Serena countered. “This is just what you do after you get dressed.”

“It’s what you do after you get dressed.” Jason returned defensively, simultaneously reaching his hand to tousle her hair. Serena eyes darted in his direction. Jason slow put his hands up.

“Walking away…” He said as he backed towards the wall, and leaned against it. To his relief she was done in a little over 15 minutes (she was known to take 30 =).

“There!” She proclaimed in a satisfied tone.

“Are you done?” Jason asked foolishly.

“Well…” She began.

“Ah ah! No, forget I asked.” Jason interrupted, knowing what was coming. “Let’s go!”

“Just a little bit,” Serena pleaded. “I got another idea.”

“No, no, no, no!” Jason moaned.

“Just a little twist—promise.”

Jason half sighed half groaned. “As long as you don’t braid it.”

“Hey! That would be cute!” Serena teased, pretending to start.

“No!” Jason cried in consternation, but he couldn’t help laughing at the same time.

“Alright, let’s go,” She laughed grabbing his hand and pulling him with her. “We’ve gotta pick up Shelby.”

“I know!” Jason shot back. “That’s why I said you needed to finish.”

“I’m done!” Serena returned defensively.

They continued arguing playfully…

There now! That was much better wasn’t it? Well, whether you agree or not, I’m much more satisfied with this one then how it was before. Thanks for reading!

-Jaybell

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